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I am the silent predator by Tom Howles

2/9/2014

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I am the silent predator.
Determined to stop your quest.
And steal your Olympic vest.

I command the trees to tremble in fear.
I command angry avalanches to anchor you here.
I will tell you when to jump or die.
Your fate is near........

The ones that came before you, did not have a chance.
Let's role the dice and see if- it's worth the dance!

I'm the ultimate master of nature.
So I decide if it's your day.....
I am the silent predator...Shhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...
I'm coming your way.....

By Tom Howles Aged 9
4 Comments
Rob Smith Literacy Shed Man
2/9/2014 06:27:46 am

I love your use of rhyme and the way that the 'voice' in this poem becomes menacingly silent at the end!

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Jane Holt
2/9/2014 06:38:55 am

This is a well crafted poem that makes excellent use of rhyme. The repetition of 'I' makes makes the silent predator grow stronger. You have created a sinister tone.

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Ann Ryan
2/10/2014 01:26:56 am

What brilliant ideas. I think the silent predator is a great image. Fantastic work.

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Stella Ifon
2/10/2014 06:35:15 am

Strong and powerful imagery created with your artistic use of repetition and rhyme. A super poem!

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