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I am the silent predator.
Determined to stop your quest. And steal your Olympic vest. I command the trees to tremble in fear. I command angry avalanches to anchor you here. I will tell you when to jump or die. Your fate is near........ The ones that came before you, did not have a chance. Let's role the dice and see if- it's worth the dance! I'm the ultimate master of nature. So I decide if it's your day..... I am the silent predator...Shhhhhhhhhhhhhhh... I'm coming your way..... By Tom Howles Aged 9
4 Comments
Rob Smith Literacy Shed Man
2/9/2014 06:27:46 am
I love your use of rhyme and the way that the 'voice' in this poem becomes menacingly silent at the end!
Jane Holt
2/9/2014 06:38:55 am
This is a well crafted poem that makes excellent use of rhyme. The repetition of 'I' makes makes the silent predator grow stronger. You have created a sinister tone.
Ann Ryan
2/10/2014 01:26:56 am
What brilliant ideas. I think the silent predator is a great image. Fantastic work.
Stella Ifon
2/10/2014 06:35:15 am
Strong and powerful imagery created with your artistic use of repetition and rhyme. A super poem! Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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