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Where your nightmares some true! By Leah age 9

2/10/2014

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Domineering, arctic – who will sneakily pass my amazing, spacious grounds?
I am the mountain where your nightmares come true.
The one who sneakily steals your broken-hearted souls.
I am the repulsive frightening conundrum.

I will quietly make icicles hop from my dim, dingy unpleasant caves
Caves that are as unpleasant as your grandma’s toes!
You won’t dare to cross my line!
Speedily I shake my shoulders and make the terrified, startled skiers jump out of their soft, smooth skin. 

I am the dreadful mammoth, a haunted ghost.
Dim, murky, repulsive – who will track down my bumpy unbreakable spine?

WILL YOU DARE CLIMB ME?
2 Comments
Miss Edwardson
2/10/2014 05:31:02 am

What a fantastic piece of writing! I love the use of personification, I really felt as though the mountain was daring me to go near it!

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Miss Ifon
2/10/2014 06:39:37 am

Powerful vocabulary and wonderful use of similes to add a dramatic effect and tone to your poem. Excellent work!

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