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I am the man of all men.
I will give you one last chance. I will make avalanches rise from the dead. The snow will make your time a crime. The icicles will clash around you like the silver sword of Gondor. Countries have tried and tried to accomplish the gold..... Let's toss the silver coin, to see if you are worthy to take the challenge....... As the winter armies tremble up mount Doom to the top...... My eyes are Gollum's precious eyes looking for its prey. I am Mr Nature, I shall witness if you are good for me. I'm the silent eater shhhhhhhh.... Do you dare to come my way? By Thomas Carr. Year 6.
10 Comments
mrmacha
2/9/2014 06:23:11 am
Great stuff lads
Mr Walker
2/9/2014 06:23:13 am
Wow. This is a stunning piece of work. Well done, such emotive and dramatic language. You should be very proud of yourself.
Jane Holt
2/9/2014 06:30:33 am
I absolutely love the imagery in your poem. 2/9/2014 03:57:27 pm
Tom has a fantastic imagination.....as soon as I played him the clip on mute- his pen sprinted into action on his whiteboard with what he saw. Then he formed his ideas into verses by performing his poem, adapting them, then writing them down.
Rebecca Everson
2/9/2014 06:38:47 pm
Excellent work , amazing such powerful words from a young man !! Well done !
Sara Luke
2/9/2014 07:31:24 pm
Fabulous Thomas. Really really proud of you
Ann Ryan
2/10/2014 01:24:13 am
What a brilliant piece of work. You have used some wonderful vocabulary and fantastic imagery. Well done.
Becky Carr
2/10/2014 03:14:20 am
A fantastic piece of work, you should be very proud of yourself Thomas for producing such a powerful poem! Well done, we are so proud of you!
MissOB
2/10/2014 05:36:30 am
Wow, very chilling!! Love the line 'My eyes are Gollum's precious eyes looking for its prey' What fantastic imagination!
marg pearce
2/11/2014 02:27:25 am
wow. this is truly amazig work from thomas. what a great future he must have in front of him Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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