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Leah

3/17/2014

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Mr Felton link
3/17/2014 08:05:19 am

Your show, not tell sentence about his brother's death is absolutely outstanding Leah. It is always better to show the reader (let the reader paint the picture with your word choice) than simply telling the reader what happened. Keep up the good work!

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Mr Literacy Shed
3/17/2014 08:13:11 am

I agree with Mr Felton, the emotion you show at the point of his brother's death is fantastic and very mature.

Well done I will be showing my Y5 class this work!

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Jaime kinvig link
3/20/2014 03:30:39 am

I think Leah's show not tell was brillent and the rest of it here's some edvice be a athor when your older love jaime

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