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Eric

3/17/2014

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Mr Literacy Shed
3/17/2014 07:50:59 am

Well done Eric, you created clear pictures in my mind. Do you think you could have even more of a range of sentence starters? Adverb and verb starters really add some interest.

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Mr Felton link
3/17/2014 08:10:58 am

I really like your paragraph opening 'He remembers waking up to an empty bed..' The places you can take this writing (and the loneliness you can make your reader feel) is endless. We will work on this when you improve your writing further Eric. Well done!

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